Instructions: Respond to the asterisked items first. If you have time, respond to the rest in numerical order. Do not confer with the writer when answering the questions.
*1. What were your reactions when first reading this draft? List some of them here.
I haven’t seen this film before and now I really want to.
2. Does the essay have a purpose beyond fulfilling the requirements of the assignment?
YES NO What do you see as that purpose?
To persuade the audience to see this film
*3. Who would be interested in the profile provided in this essay?
Anyone who loves movies and enjoys reading another person’s analysis.
4. To what audience is the essay directed, and is this the appropriate audience for the subject?
The audience is the movie-lover and this review is written for that audience!
5. List two examples that show how this essay appeals to the needs of this audience. Refer to specific tone, word choice, details included, format, and so forth.
a. The introduction is written to add emphasize to his passion for the film
b The author references the film without giving anything away, which keeps the reader intrigued
*6. What is the essay’s main point or thesis? Write the thesis sentence down here.
Its symbolism refers to Greek mythology on how the deceased always had to pay a toll for the boat keeper to get them across the river to the underworld. Smecker started to realize that these aren’t just random killing but they are killings with a reason
Is the thesis specific enough? YES NO If not, make suggestions for narrowing the focus.
Yes, I love the eerie message!
*7. Reread each paragraph, noting whether it is related to the thesis of the essay.
Par. 1 YES NO Par. 5 YES NO
Par. 2 YES NO Par. 6 YES NO
Par. 3 YES NO Par. 7 YES NO
Par. 4 YES NO Par. 8 YES NO
*8. Has the writer sufficiently covered of the topic, discussing the who, what, where, when, how, and why of the profile? Comment:
*9. Comment on the relevance and effectiveness of the information conveyed below.
a. Are the essay’s facts interesting? YES NO SOMEWHAT
Please note any facts you found uninteresting or off the subject:
I like that you included this idea that there is meaning behind every killing, but develop that more. How is this connected to the film?
b. Does the essay make clear why all the information is significant?
YES NO UNSURE If not, explain here:
The essay is very clear
c. Is the information understandable to you? YES NO Comment:
yes
d. Is the language clear, with technical terms defined? YES NO
List terms that need to be defined here:
10. In which paragraphs would you like to see more information (facts and examples)?
Par. 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 Why?
*11. Comment on the handling of the sources of the profile.
a. What person or persons were interviewed?
The author took reference to another review of this film.
b. Explain what makes the person interviewed an appropriate source of information.
The reviewer was a professional… reviewing films is that person’s livelihood.
c. What other sources of information are used? (List them.)
d. Are quotations, facts, and paraphrases attributed and documented clearly and correctly?
12. Does the introduction
a. Get readers’ attention? YES NO
b. Present the thesis? YES NO
c. Introduce readers to the essay’s perspective? YES NO
d. Comments:
13. Does the conclusion
a. Remind you of what has been said? YES NO
b Provide something new to think about? YES NO
c. Round the essay off smoothly? YES NO
d. Comments:
I really want to see this film!
Instructions: Respond to the asterisked items first. If you have time, respond to the rest in numerical order. Do not confer with the writer when answering the questions.
*1. What were your reactions when first reading this draft? List some of them here.
I want to see this movie! It seems like a very good movie.
2. Does the essay have a purpose beyond fulfilling the requirements of the assignment?
YES NO What do you see as that purpose?
Yes, to review the movie and get people to watch this movie
*3. Who would be interested in the profile provided in this essay?
Anyone that love watching movies.
4. To what audience is the essay directed, and is this the appropriate audience for the subject?
Anyone who wants to watch this movie.
5. List two examples that show how this essay appeals to the needs of this audience. Refer to specific tone, word choice, details included, format, and so forth.
a. Detail, word choice
b. Very interesting introduction
*6. What is the essay’s main point or thesis? Write the thesis sentence down here.
The Boondock Saints, which is about two brothers,Connor (Sean Patrick Flanery) and Murphy (Norman Reedus) McManus that decide to rid the scum off the streets of Boston while avoiding being tracked down by the FBI.
Is the thesis specific enough? YES NO If not, make suggestions for narrowing the focus.
Yes
*7. Reread each paragraph, noting whether it is related to the thesis of the essay.
Par. 1 YES Par. 5 YES
Par. 2 YES Par. 6 YES
Par. 3 YES Par. 7 YES
Par. 4 YES Par. 8 YES
*8. Has the writer sufficiently covered of the topic, discussing the who, what, where, when, how, and why of the profile? Comment:
Yes
*9. Comment on the relevance and effectiveness of the information conveyed below.
a. Are the essay’s facts interesting? YES NO SOMEWHAT
Please note any facts you found uninteresting or off the subject:
Yes
b. Does the essay make clear why all the information is significant?
YES NO UNSURE If not, explain here:
Yes
c. Is the information understandable to you? YES NO Comment:
Yes
d. Is the language clear, with technical terms defined? YES NO
List terms that need to be defined here:
Yes
10. In which paragraphs would you like to see more information (facts and examples)?
Par. 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 Why?
None
*11. Comment on the handling of the sources of the profile.
a. What person or persons were interviewed?
Other author’s review about this movie
b. Explain what makes the person interviewed an appropriate source of information.
Professional reviewer
c. What other sources of information are used? (List them.)
Website
d. Are quotations, facts, and paraphrases attributed and documented clearly and correctly?
Yes
12. Does the introduction
a. Get readers’ attention? YES
b. Present the thesis? YES
c. Introduce readers to the essay’s perspective? YES
d. Comments:
13. Does the conclusion
a. Remind you of what has been said? YES
b Provide something new to think about? YES
c. Round the essay off smoothly? YES
d. Comments:
2 Comments
Written Peer Response
Essay writer’s name___Rich_____________________ Peer’s name__Liz Perez________
Instructions: Respond to the asterisked items first. If you have time, respond to the rest in numerical order. Do not confer with the writer when answering the questions.
*1. What were your reactions when first reading this draft? List some of them here.
I haven’t seen this film before and now I really want to.
2. Does the essay have a purpose beyond fulfilling the requirements of the assignment?
YES NO What do you see as that purpose?
To persuade the audience to see this film
*3. Who would be interested in the profile provided in this essay?
Anyone who loves movies and enjoys reading another person’s analysis.
4. To what audience is the essay directed, and is this the appropriate audience for the subject?
The audience is the movie-lover and this review is written for that audience!
5. List two examples that show how this essay appeals to the needs of this audience. Refer to specific tone, word choice, details included, format, and so forth.
a. The introduction is written to add emphasize to his passion for the film
b The author references the film without giving anything away, which keeps the reader intrigued
*6. What is the essay’s main point or thesis? Write the thesis sentence down here.
Its symbolism refers to Greek mythology on how the deceased always had to pay a toll for the boat keeper to get them across the river to the underworld. Smecker started to realize that these aren’t just random killing but they are killings with a reason
Is the thesis specific enough? YES NO If not, make suggestions for narrowing the focus.
Yes, I love the eerie message!
*7. Reread each paragraph, noting whether it is related to the thesis of the essay.
Par. 1 YES NO Par. 5 YES NO
Par. 2 YES NO Par. 6 YES NO
Par. 3 YES NO Par. 7 YES NO
Par. 4 YES NO Par. 8 YES NO
*8. Has the writer sufficiently covered of the topic, discussing the who, what, where, when, how, and why of the profile? Comment:
*9. Comment on the relevance and effectiveness of the information conveyed below.
a. Are the essay’s facts interesting? YES NO SOMEWHAT
Please note any facts you found uninteresting or off the subject:
I like that you included this idea that there is meaning behind every killing, but develop that more. How is this connected to the film?
b. Does the essay make clear why all the information is significant?
YES NO UNSURE If not, explain here:
The essay is very clear
c. Is the information understandable to you? YES NO Comment:
yes
d. Is the language clear, with technical terms defined? YES NO
List terms that need to be defined here:
10. In which paragraphs would you like to see more information (facts and examples)?
Par. 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 Why?
*11. Comment on the handling of the sources of the profile.
a. What person or persons were interviewed?
The author took reference to another review of this film.
b. Explain what makes the person interviewed an appropriate source of information.
The reviewer was a professional… reviewing films is that person’s livelihood.
c. What other sources of information are used? (List them.)
d. Are quotations, facts, and paraphrases attributed and documented clearly and correctly?
12. Does the introduction
a. Get readers’ attention? YES NO
b. Present the thesis? YES NO
c. Introduce readers to the essay’s perspective? YES NO
d. Comments:
13. Does the conclusion
a. Remind you of what has been said? YES NO
b Provide something new to think about? YES NO
c. Round the essay off smoothly? YES NO
d. Comments:
I really want to see this film!
Written Peer Response
Essay writer’s name______Rich_________ Peer’s name_____Suchart sernvongsat_________
Instructions: Respond to the asterisked items first. If you have time, respond to the rest in numerical order. Do not confer with the writer when answering the questions.
*1. What were your reactions when first reading this draft? List some of them here.
I want to see this movie! It seems like a very good movie.
2. Does the essay have a purpose beyond fulfilling the requirements of the assignment?
YES NO What do you see as that purpose?
Yes, to review the movie and get people to watch this movie
*3. Who would be interested in the profile provided in this essay?
Anyone that love watching movies.
4. To what audience is the essay directed, and is this the appropriate audience for the subject?
Anyone who wants to watch this movie.
5. List two examples that show how this essay appeals to the needs of this audience. Refer to specific tone, word choice, details included, format, and so forth.
a. Detail, word choice
b. Very interesting introduction
*6. What is the essay’s main point or thesis? Write the thesis sentence down here.
The Boondock Saints, which is about two brothers,Connor (Sean Patrick Flanery) and Murphy (Norman Reedus) McManus that decide to rid the scum off the streets of Boston while avoiding being tracked down by the FBI.
Is the thesis specific enough? YES NO If not, make suggestions for narrowing the focus.
Yes
*7. Reread each paragraph, noting whether it is related to the thesis of the essay.
Par. 1 YES Par. 5 YES
Par. 2 YES Par. 6 YES
Par. 3 YES Par. 7 YES
Par. 4 YES Par. 8 YES
*8. Has the writer sufficiently covered of the topic, discussing the who, what, where, when, how, and why of the profile? Comment:
Yes
*9. Comment on the relevance and effectiveness of the information conveyed below.
a. Are the essay’s facts interesting? YES NO SOMEWHAT
Please note any facts you found uninteresting or off the subject:
Yes
b. Does the essay make clear why all the information is significant?
YES NO UNSURE If not, explain here:
Yes
c. Is the information understandable to you? YES NO Comment:
Yes
d. Is the language clear, with technical terms defined? YES NO
List terms that need to be defined here:
Yes
10. In which paragraphs would you like to see more information (facts and examples)?
Par. 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 Why?
None
*11. Comment on the handling of the sources of the profile.
a. What person or persons were interviewed?
Other author’s review about this movie
b. Explain what makes the person interviewed an appropriate source of information.
Professional reviewer
c. What other sources of information are used? (List them.)
Website
d. Are quotations, facts, and paraphrases attributed and documented clearly and correctly?
Yes
12. Does the introduction
a. Get readers’ attention? YES
b. Present the thesis? YES
c. Introduce readers to the essay’s perspective? YES
d. Comments:
13. Does the conclusion
a. Remind you of what has been said? YES
b Provide something new to think about? YES
c. Round the essay off smoothly? YES
d. Comments: